某位同學上岸了，而且發來了英文版的感謝信，如下！
看了信，先是一陣驚喜，畢竟是考研上岸了。而且，這篇英文感謝信，我基本能看懂，雖然是查了“stomatology”后才知道這個詞表示“口腔醫學”。
所以，還是先向這位寶寶表示誠摯的祝賀！Congratulations!
但細讀了這封信后，我覺得身為ta曾經的考研英語寫作老師，我深感羞愧，因為這篇感謝信里有不少的錯誤（下文紅色部分均有語法表述不當之處）。
Dear Mr.Sky， It's exceedingly delighted to recall those days when i was a student of you. Today, I, am writing for the purpose of expressing my appreciation, because i have been accepted in school of stomatology, Sun yat sen university. I, as a student, am much grateful for your devoted work. It was your help that enabled me to acquire adequate knowleage, aroused my enthusiasm for study and help me broaden horizons. Accordingly, I am now share the happy moment with you. Compared with other teacher, you are more patient, and it's you told us that practice makes perfect. Finally, I took a giant leap forward in English. I am quite obliged to you and I deem that it is of great necessity for me to work harder to achieve greater success.
Yours' sincerely,
Kate
修正如下：
1、It's exceedingly delighted to recall those days when i was a student of you.
改為：I am exceedingly delighted to recall those days when I was one of your students.
解析：要么寫成I am exceedingly delighted to do sth, 要么寫成It is so great to do sth, 因為delighted 表人的心情愉快，主語應該是人。
I was a student of you，這個表達屬于Chinglish，建議改為：I was one of your students. 我是您的學生之一。
2、devoted work, 改用hard work 更合適
3、It was your help that enabled me to accumulate ..., arouse ... and help...，其中accumulate, arouse和help 為并列關系，都應該用原形。
4、I am now share ... 這到底是主系表，還是主謂賓？改為：Now, I am so happy to share ...
5、It is you told us that ... 改為 It was you that/who told us ... 強調句式It was ... that/who ...
你們看到了嗎？雖然這個同學考上了研究生，但我得給人家道個歉，因為這英文感謝信明顯就是跟著我學的，學生本事沒學得到家，老師也得承擔責任。
寫到這里，其實有多少有點凡爾賽的感覺，畢竟能用英文把感謝信順利寫下來，且只有少數不影響理解的錯誤，已經算很不錯了。
事實上，很多所謂寫作名師的輔導課也只是老師在講，學生在聽，老師能把范文講的很精彩，那叫美文賞析，但不叫寫作輔導，因為學生沒有動筆寫的寫作課就不能稱之為寫作輔導課。
所以，雖然這位同學的感謝信并不完美，甚至讓我有點蒙羞，但這依然是一封相對成功的小作文！
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